Basically I would have cut out a lot more like the playground and way too much roof. The view from the house is ok but showing people the view from the air, right there... lets them see that there really isn't a view, but that's just me seeing a lot of flat land. The shorter the movie, the better - so don't waste time when it's over by letting it run on and on while boring the viewer. The video ended at 2:42 but you ran it out, so just fade out the music a few seconds before you want it to end and then cut it off. You should keep this to less than 60 seconds, with just a short music intro if any. Voice over and tell us in person what you want us to see. Personally, I don't use music much unless it really is needed, and the generic garbage , well... Like was said above, you just need some time editing and it all comes easy and quickly. Really take the time to learn your editing program and use as much of it as you can. Voice over takes some practice and may take you a couple of hours the first time to learn the right settings to match all of the volumes but get a journal just for your editing and write everything in there for future reference. Like volume level numbers, favorite splices, best format like mpeg, etc. I made a ton of movies a few years ago in .wmv and then YT changed the format on all .wmv's to wide screen, which changed the aspect ratios on everyone's .wmv's to short and really wide people... lol, so always keep the videos that you have loaded up and want for future reference on an external drive for later, so you can change the format to mpeg or whatever and reload.